Global warming refers to the continuous rising of the Earth’s temperature due to greenhouse effect. Initially, the greenhouse gases maintain the Earth’s temperature at 33oc that sustain the great biodiversity of life in Earth. However, industrial revolution in 18th and 19th boost up the demand for energy which mainly obtained from combustion of fossil fuel. (Chris Woodford 2006) Enormous amount of carbon dioxide are being emitted and greenhouse effect are magnified which cause the temperature of Earth to rise. The Earth’s climate could become unpredictable due to increase of temperature of Earth and this could aggravate the life on Earth.
Global warming brings adverse affects to the balanced ecosystem in different part of earth The climate change caused by global warming happens too fast that plant and animal are not able to adapt to the changes. In Arctic, sea ice melts quickly due to increase in temperature. Polar bear that rely on sea ice may die while migratory birds lose their habitat. (Chris Woodford 2006) On the other hand, in the tropical country, coral reefs are predicted to be killed by the warming sea water and the complex ecosystem surround coral reefs are damaged. Extinction is predicted to be happened on 30-40 percent of the world’s species due to alter in climate pattern. (Chris Woodford 2006)
Moreover, climate change brings severe consequences to human too. Warmer ocean caused the formation of stronger storm. United States set the record for tornado while Japan set the record for typhoons in 2004. The first-ever Hurricane in South Atlantic happens in Brazil. (Al Gore 2007) These acute phenomena bring more damage where the recovery loss for severe weather damage by insurance industrial rise annually. (Al Gore 2007) Besides, global warming paradoxically not only cause more flood by increasing the rainfall, but also cause more soil vaporization that lead to more drought. 100-200 million people are predicted to lose their home by 2100 due to climate change flood. (Chris Woodford 2006) Melting of ice glacier also reduce the availability of water sources where 40% of the population will face water crisis in the future. (Al Gore 2007)
In order to avert the precarious result of climate change due to global warming, carbon dioxide emission should be lessen by improving the efficiency of usage of energy. Individual can easily reduce their personal carbon dioxide emissions by putting more concern on their living lifestyle. If individual switches to use high-efficiency electricity and raise the level of fuel economy in mind, level of carbon emission can be lowered below the level on 1970 which reduce global warming. (Al Gore 2007) Some practical ways are choosing energy-saving fluorescent lamps in home, switch to utility company which generate energy from renewable source and bicycle or walk instead of driving in daily life. (Chris Woodford 2006) Hence, each individual is capable to bring intermediate affect if they have strong determination.
While in terms of greater group of people, the government of each country plays an undeniable role in addressing global warming. No country will purposely reduce their country’s carbon emission due to the fact the country will face economical disadvantage. Reduction in carbon emission links to limiting of energy usage which could affect the country economic growth. (Chris Woodford 2006) However, Stern Report by British government in 2006 state that global Gross Domestic Product (GDP) will drop by 20% due to global warming whereas GDP will drop by 1% if the country spend money to curb global warming and climate change now. (Chris Woodford 2006) Hence, developed countries like United States and developing countries like China should participate in the worldwide climate-change treaty, Kyoto Protocol.
In short, global warming is a modern environmental catastrophe caused by human civilization and industrial revolution which affect the life of people globally. The ramifications of global warming can be seen easily. Hence, mankind should responsible and contribute their effort to combat global warming. With strong determination, mankind will able to preserve this lovely planet in the future. (Al Gore 2007)
Global warming brings adverse affects to the balanced ecosystem in different part of earth The climate change caused by global warming happens too fast that plant and animal are not able to adapt to the changes. In Arctic, sea ice melts quickly due to increase in temperature. Polar bear that rely on sea ice may die while migratory birds lose their habitat. (Chris Woodford 2006) On the other hand, in the tropical country, coral reefs are predicted to be killed by the warming sea water and the complex ecosystem surround coral reefs are damaged. Extinction is predicted to be happened on 30-40 percent of the world’s species due to alter in climate pattern. (Chris Woodford 2006)
Moreover, climate change brings severe consequences to human too. Warmer ocean caused the formation of stronger storm. United States set the record for tornado while Japan set the record for typhoons in 2004. The first-ever Hurricane in South Atlantic happens in Brazil. (Al Gore 2007) These acute phenomena bring more damage where the recovery loss for severe weather damage by insurance industrial rise annually. (Al Gore 2007) Besides, global warming paradoxically not only cause more flood by increasing the rainfall, but also cause more soil vaporization that lead to more drought. 100-200 million people are predicted to lose their home by 2100 due to climate change flood. (Chris Woodford 2006) Melting of ice glacier also reduce the availability of water sources where 40% of the population will face water crisis in the future. (Al Gore 2007)
In order to avert the precarious result of climate change due to global warming, carbon dioxide emission should be lessen by improving the efficiency of usage of energy. Individual can easily reduce their personal carbon dioxide emissions by putting more concern on their living lifestyle. If individual switches to use high-efficiency electricity and raise the level of fuel economy in mind, level of carbon emission can be lowered below the level on 1970 which reduce global warming. (Al Gore 2007) Some practical ways are choosing energy-saving fluorescent lamps in home, switch to utility company which generate energy from renewable source and bicycle or walk instead of driving in daily life. (Chris Woodford 2006) Hence, each individual is capable to bring intermediate affect if they have strong determination.
While in terms of greater group of people, the government of each country plays an undeniable role in addressing global warming. No country will purposely reduce their country’s carbon emission due to the fact the country will face economical disadvantage. Reduction in carbon emission links to limiting of energy usage which could affect the country economic growth. (Chris Woodford 2006) However, Stern Report by British government in 2006 state that global Gross Domestic Product (GDP) will drop by 20% due to global warming whereas GDP will drop by 1% if the country spend money to curb global warming and climate change now. (Chris Woodford 2006) Hence, developed countries like United States and developing countries like China should participate in the worldwide climate-change treaty, Kyoto Protocol.
In short, global warming is a modern environmental catastrophe caused by human civilization and industrial revolution which affect the life of people globally. The ramifications of global warming can be seen easily. Hence, mankind should responsible and contribute their effort to combat global warming. With strong determination, mankind will able to preserve this lovely planet in the future. (Al Gore 2007)
second paragraph, not affects but effects, also for 4th paragraph..I like your introduction..quite well written..a lot vocab for me..
ReplyDelete4th paragraph..2nd line..
ReplyDeleteshould be LESSENED..instead of should be LESSEN..
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ReplyDelete1. Is there a clear introductory sentence that introduces the subject matter and the controlling idea? What do you suggest for improvement if the introductory sentence is not clear?
Overall the introductory sentence is good and clear. However, I think that the definition of global warming is not precise enough. It should be the rising of Earth’s surface average temperature since the rising of the Earth’s temperature may have a meaning of temperature of all every single thing on the Earth is rising.
2. Is there a thesis statement given as the last sentence of the introductory paragraph? Is it clear and connected to all the topic sentences of the body paragraphs?
It is a clear thesis statement, nothing more to comment about it.
3. Do the paragraphs have sufficient supporting details and examples? How can the organization be improved?
The whole essay is well organised. The supporting details and example given are clear and sufficient. But in the second paragraph, in the “United States set the record for tornado while Japan set the record for typhoons in 2004.”, no number of records had been mentioned. Tornado and typhoon that happen in the Japan and America can be a natural disaster due to their geographical positions. So, I suggest that you should give the actual figure to show how serious the global warming have cause the more frequent tornado and typhoon to happen.
4. Are there any paragraphs which are not supported well?
Each paragraph is well written. The elaborations given are clear.
5. Are there any sentences or sections that are not clear? If so, how can they be improved?
3rd paragraph, “the recovery loss for severe weather damage by insurance industrial rise annually” should be “loss recovery”. This will make less confusion.
6. Does the conclusion summarize all the main points given in the essay or restate the thesis statement? Is it clear? If not, how can the writer improve this part?
A well conclusion, but in the end the “in the future” sounds like human being will only take action to solve this problem in the future but not now. I suggest that “in the future” should be cut off.
7. Does the writer cite the sources adequately and appropriately? Note any incorrect citation.
The overall citation is appropriate and no mistake can be found by me.
8. Are there any apparent grammatical or spelling mistakes?
In the 1st paragraph, it should be 18th and 19th centuries. In the 2nd and 4th paragraph, it is affects but not effects and is lessened instead of lessen in 4th paragraph. There are still grammatical errors in the verbs that should be in single form. So far I these all I can find out.
9. Does the writer comprehensively cover appropriate materials available from the standard sources? If no, what is missing?
All appropriate materials have been covered, the essay is informative.
10. Additional comments
Overall the essay is factual and straight to the point, it is a well essay. Keep up the good work.